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Tuesday, August 8, 2017

Buster the Boxer?, Wait a Boxer!

Its the start of a new term and for the 2nd week of term we are writing a story as if we were the eyes of this character.  The character is a dog that envious of something that is happening outside.  It could be anything but it was something that a girl was doing at the start of the story.

So I have written the story as if I were the character.  I hope you like reading my story

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“Buster the Boxer”
I was looking at Lily, inside her aesthetic room, outside was a frigid place with grass as white as cloud.  She was leaping across her jolting bed.  Oh, what was that it was her dear mother, it is now my chance to…  Nevermind there is no more space on her jarring bed.  Oh, how I wish that I could just jounce on her bed or maybe a…….

I scrutinized her dad who was building some kind of configuration to prance in, like a trampoline that had black walls but it had a minuscule hole.  It had bewitching decorations with a ravishing velvet bow.  Instantaneously  a inadequate fox had approached the trampoline with his furry friend.  

“Hey! Look at this!” said Zander.  (1st Fox)
“What is it?” Asked Elizabeth.  (2nd Fox)
“I - I think it is a trampoline!” said Zander.
“Should we go inside?”asked Elizabeth.
“Of course, why shouldn't we?” said Zander
I looked outside again, there was something I was so  begrudging about, it was how they cavorted around the trampoline.  
“Hey! Can I join you?” said June
“Of course come on in!” said Elizabeth and Zander.
“Wow! This is so bouncy!”said June
I saw a badger jumping in the trampoline I was so envious.
“What is this?” said Sean
“It's called a trampoline!” said Elizabeth, Zander and June.
Suddenly I saw it, it was a Squirrel, the way they jumped it makes me so covetous.
“Cool! It's so bouncy.” said Sean.
“Let me get in here!” said Rossina
“Why! Oh why!” I screamed in my head.
I saw it was a Hedgehog jumping with these joyful animals, somehow I wonder why I can’t jump out on that tremendous trampoline.

Finally it was morning, as Lily woke up with a euphoric smile, she saw the trampoline.

As she woke up, I zoomed down the stairs and to the living room.  When I arrived the door was still closed.  So I waited near the door, until Lily and her parent come down.  I saw her dash through the living room and went straight for the magnificent trampoline.   

Here I also made a video for the story, I am going to read the story to you. Hope you like it!


3 comments:

  1. Hi
    This is really good Lyan and I loved reading it but you don't really need to put (fox 1 ) etc just put that person said, but keep up the great work

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    1. Nature, thanks for the good advice, I just wanted to put it in so people don't get confused in the animals, but anyways thanks for the good advice.

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  2. Hi Lyan, you blog post was so amazing it blow my socks off and you done a really good job for your buster the boxer keep it up Lyan.

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