The Piano......

Our extravaganza is finished so this week we were focusing on a video called The Piano.  The Piano is about this Grandpa he is playing a sad tune, and throughout the video, what I am saying is the the story is really sad.  It is also a inspiring story, I almost cried, I also only watched 1 time, it made me to sad.  So I hope you like reading my story.  

Reflective Comment: I think I did pretty, I don't really know what to work on. 

W.A.L.T: Recall again what is happening in the story.

Success Criteria

• Re-call what is happening in the video.
• Use adjectives and experiment with language features.
• Use paragraphs correctly.
• Begin sentences with different/ interesting sentence starters.

The Piano

I was alone in this inconsolable house.  As I started playing the grand piano, I started playing a sorrow, crestfallen and forlorn tune, just like as a river flows to the soiled dirt.  Just playing the grand piano makes my heart feel like it's melting into millions of pieces.  The piano keys were are white as the fluffy clouds, floating up in the sky. I was starting to remember the memorable things that I had.  As time goes the more things you lose or is it the more things you get…...

I remember playing this crestfallen song with my lovely wife, it seems like my wife was right next to me.  It felt like happy times, she kissed in my cracked, dry cheek, but a flash of light she was gone.  Now I seemed so sad, what had happened to her?  Where was she gone to?  It seems now that I lost her, a few minutes had past I had just remembered the first world war.  It was as woebegone as a broken hearted person.  I heard a range of fire bomb hitting the trenches our trenches only my friend and I survived KAPOW!  After a few minutes passed I just realized that my friend had already got out of the trenches and sacrificed his life.  He was gone too.

I continued playing the despondent tune.  Crying feels good but the I will keep the pain inside not to let out a single word, for as the pain you may not know how to take.  I had just remembered the time that my parent had given me a horse head toy it was my 8th birthday.  I had for a long time, now I had given it to my lovely grandson.  For that he will remember and we both continued the wretched tune together.